tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post5705746075591768320..comments2024-01-03T02:24:32.515-08:00Comments on Where Ladybugs Roar ~ Wendy's Writing Blog: First Page BlogfestWendy Sparrowhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06240583852940769313noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-71651430471674704842010-04-10T07:21:19.569-07:002010-04-10T07:21:19.569-07:00I love how you begin this with how rabbits and har...I love how you begin this with how rabbits and hares are born, and bring us into Kai's world. The line about how she was born with her eyes open, but didn't see until she lost her sight is a great hook! (sorry I'm so late to comment!)Amalia Dillinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13005039978668326144noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-27306600001105215872010-04-04T23:18:07.019-07:002010-04-04T23:18:07.019-07:00:) Thanks, everyone!!! You guys are so nice.
Ja...:) Thanks, everyone!!! You guys are so nice.<br /><br />Jaime, this is even worse than one you haven't read... this is one I haven't finished. I love it, though... The premise, I mean. I WANT to finish it. I just haven't figured out what is chasing the John in this. Plus, I bumped it back one to COH #12.Wendy Sparrowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06240583852940769313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-80369344574172475632010-04-04T22:37:05.920-07:002010-04-04T22:37:05.920-07:00Great last paragraph. I'm intrigued. I want to...Great last paragraph. I'm intrigued. I want to meet the dark-haired man, too. Way to write!Roxyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787088898112141579noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-61700040450830258952010-04-03T18:50:35.655-07:002010-04-03T18:50:35.655-07:00Okay you should not be able to post from books I h...Okay you should not be able to post from books I haven't read! It's mean! :( I sit and wait so patiently (kind of) until you do something like this.<br /><br />Hey Agent/Publisher! Hurry up and Sign my Sister!Jaimenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-68108702378182578042010-04-03T14:45:11.027-07:002010-04-03T14:45:11.027-07:00Oh, very nice, good lady. I like this a lot. You&#...Oh, very nice, good lady. I like this a lot. You've established two characters in a short space, and made the reader keen for more.<br /><br />Also, I love the challenge of removing one of the senses. It opens your mind up to other ways of seeing, doesn't it?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-14861202659918430412010-04-03T10:08:02.087-07:002010-04-03T10:08:02.087-07:00I agree with Mary's comment: I love this entir...I agree with Mary's comment: I love this entire passage, but I think it would have more power to move your "I was born with my eyes open, but it wasn’t until I lost my sight that I started to see" sentence to be the opening line.<br />Still, wonderful setting and characterization.Bryan Sabolhttp://www.timeguardiansaga.com/blog/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-30955379574201094162010-04-03T07:01:03.068-07:002010-04-03T07:01:03.068-07:00I like it Wendy - I do wonder though if the - born...I like it Wendy - I do wonder though if the - born with my eyes open - line should be your actual beginning. It's a great hook. All of it is very unique though and I definitely want to keep reading.Mary E Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13119298615414367828noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-13730971459415223082010-04-03T06:48:04.568-07:002010-04-03T06:48:04.568-07:00Not all animals are born with their eyes open.
Yo...Not all animals are born with their eyes open. <br />You hooked me right away with this sentence. The pacing was great. Your words just flowed. Great job. Thanks for participating.Kelly Lymanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14773120663217816189noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-54473977827170250542010-04-03T06:26:06.403-07:002010-04-03T06:26:06.403-07:00This is a really good opening. I loved the 1st sen...This is a really good opening. I loved the 1st sentence to lead into the rabbit/hare, and then I loved the sentence leading into the MC.Tarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09008153523366719973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-20204693783698625372010-04-02T22:23:41.388-07:002010-04-02T22:23:41.388-07:00The rabbit thing was great! I never would have exp...The rabbit thing was great! I never would have expected something like that to work, but it's awesome.Katiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06851403823244758904noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-22664272785911700892010-04-02T19:04:03.070-07:002010-04-02T19:04:03.070-07:00Nicely done. Has a steady flow, and a bit of a my...Nicely done. Has a steady flow, and a bit of a mystery in almost every sentence. I can't imagine a better last line. Definitely hooked.<br /><br />.........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-81807960439862425322010-04-02T18:46:25.075-07:002010-04-02T18:46:25.075-07:00Ooh, I love this as well. Great voice. You do a gr...Ooh, I love this as well. Great voice. You do a great job showing us her world, which is quite a challenge with a blind POV.feywriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17224558691840388691noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-88465550923263303832010-04-02T18:08:04.696-07:002010-04-02T18:08:04.696-07:00Ugh! Now, I want to read more. You always suck me ...Ugh! Now, I want to read more. You always suck me in with these blogfests, ya know?Tina Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05914428134837892539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-89659704189106955832010-04-02T17:35:16.486-07:002010-04-02T17:35:16.486-07:00Very nice. Great writing, great character, great i...Very nice. Great writing, great character, great intriguing question about how she'll help the stranger or if she'll get herself into trouble.sally https://www.blogger.com/profile/11068670473065918371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-8407381678643161862010-04-02T17:26:02.221-07:002010-04-02T17:26:02.221-07:00Seriously, everytime you post a new excerpt, I wan...Seriously, everytime you post a new excerpt, I want to just quit writing and be your full time beta reader.<br /><br />This is awesome, just like everything else you write. How is it possible for one person to have so much talent?! So many fantastic ideas?!Leigh Hutchens Burchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13974935740527936303noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-13157812103448673192010-04-02T17:06:34.226-07:002010-04-02T17:06:34.226-07:00Beautiful opening that leads into a character who ...Beautiful opening that leads into a character who is filled with intrigue. This is definitely a book I want to read. Well done!Portiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13435815819572442582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-34760441970558733422010-04-02T16:20:49.916-07:002010-04-02T16:20:49.916-07:00Love the opening and how it leads into your charac...Love the opening and how it leads into your character's voice.Wendy Ramer, Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17430380409796887696noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-63841584312254529332010-04-02T16:18:52.037-07:002010-04-02T16:18:52.037-07:00Oh wow! You have to finish this one because that b...Oh wow! You have to finish this one because that beginning is amazing! Every word flowed into the next, the dialogue and descriptions are wonderful and I love your characters!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08616276555920544920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-48554558362722969692010-04-02T15:43:01.819-07:002010-04-02T15:43:01.819-07:00Like Charity, I was drawn to "until I lost my...Like Charity, I was drawn to "until I lost my sight" There is a haunting lyrical poetry to your words. RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-46803565590741704102010-04-02T13:55:08.078-07:002010-04-02T13:55:08.078-07:00Great opening Wendy =)Great opening Wendy =)Natalie Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01116611923169722657noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7589253886068784629.post-36544513294384214402010-04-02T13:47:34.175-07:002010-04-02T13:47:34.175-07:00Wow, I didn't think the rabbit and hare beginn...Wow, I didn't think the rabbit and hare beginning would work, but it did. <br /><br />I love this line, "I was born with my eyes open, but it wasn’t until I lost my sight that I started to see." <br /><br />And the ending totally makes me want to read more.Charity Bradfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01960821077619680661noreply@blogger.com