As I'm rereading this, I've used a passive voice way too frequently, and I'm stating things that are obvious. Yeah... this needed a rewrite. After I'm done with this rewrite, I might reprint it before I start approaching agents again. It's so much easier to spot typos in a printed copy and Lulu's rate of around $7 beats what I could have it printed for.
Back to self-disgust and adverb slaughter.